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Thanks you for your correction i'll be carefull :shock: with the rest of stuff for the next time but now onwards what should i do?
will wait to reply,
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It would be better to post in the thread in which you started your topic. That way we can keep track of what you are talking about. (Just a friendly reminder.)

Tdol is a good teacher. He has been quite helpful to many learners.

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RonBee said:
It would be better to post in the thread in which you started your topic. That way we can keep track of what you are talking about. (Just a friendly reminder.)

Tdol is a good teacher. He has been quite helpful to many learners.

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alrite thank you so much Ron Bee..infect i am new here and don;don't know much about but from now i'll be careful and will be in thread....thanks for your reminding. I am glad that i have a friend like you and Tdol..thank you so much for your help.
Now tell me what should i do onwards?which help me in start writing.thank you will wait for the respond take care ,
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OK- I'll reply a bit later when I've finished work. ;-)
 

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Try a longer piece. ;-)
 

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How should you start writing? Pick something to write about. You could talk about how you found this forum. What were you doing? Did you have a question you wanted answered? How was it handled? Were you satisfied with the answer? Do you think this forum will help you with your English?

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How should you start writing? Pick something to write about. You could talk about how you found this forum. What were you doing? Did you have a question you wanted answered? How was it handled? Were you satisfied with the answer? Do you think this forum will help you with your English?

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Alrite RonBee thanks for giving me some guide line i will start writing not tomorrow but from today and at the same time i hope that you will correct my mistakes which helps me in improving my english.
First of all i would like to thanks to the Organisers of this site.Who has made such a brilliant site through which one can easily imporves language.Here one can find all the topics in respect of English Language. And the teacher here are too good they are too cooperative, admiring,sympthatic and understanding. One can not think that he or she is in the stage of learning.
Yes I have one question with you and with Tdol that "Will I be able to write like you?and as helpful as you people are?and as good as you are?and when i'll be able to have a good command over my English?
will look forward for the reply Take care ,
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kutekool_22 said:
RonBee said:
How should you start writing? Pick something to write about. You could talk about how you found this forum. What were you doing? Did you have a question you wanted answered? How was it handled? Were you satisfied with the answer? Do you think this forum will help you with your English?

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Alrite RonBee thanks for giving me some guide line i will start writing not tomorrow but from today and at the same time i hope that you will correct my mistakes which helps me in improving my english.
First of all i would like to thanks to the Organisers of this site.Who has made such a brilliant site through which one can easily imporves language.Here one can find all the topics in respect of English Language. And the teacher here are too good they are too cooperative, admiring,sympthatic and understanding. One can not think that he or she is in the stage of learning.
Yes I have one question with you and with Tdol that "Will I be able to write like you?and as helpful as you people are?and as good as you are?and when i'll be able to have a good command over my English?
will look forward for the reply Take care ,
:lilangel:

Okay, Kute! I'll do what I can. I will "translate" your comments into idiomatic English and also make some comments and suggestions.

  • All right, RonBee! Thanks for giving me some guidelines. I won't wait until tomorrow, but I will start writing today. At the same time, I hope you will correct my mistakes, because that will help me to improve my English.



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kutekool_22 said:
First of all i would like to thanks to the Organisers of this site.Who has made such a brilliant site through which one can easily imporves language.Here one can find all the topics in respect of English Language. And the teacher here are too good they are too cooperative, admiring,sympthatic and understanding. One can not think that he or she is in the stage of learning.

  • First of all, I would like to thank the organizers of this site. They have put together a brilliant site which is helpful to anybody wanting to improve their English. Here people can find any kind of help they need as far as learning the English language. The teachers here are kind, patient, and knowledgeable. It's great!

I know I changed things a bit, but you can't use "too cooperative", and "too good" doesn't usually make sense.


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Yes I have one question with you and with Tdol that "Will I be able to write like you?and as helpful as you people are?and as good as you are?and when i'll be able to have a good command over my English?
will look forward for the reply Take care ,
:lilangel:

  • I have one question for you and Tdol--will I ever be able to write like you? Will I ever be as helpful as you are? Will I someday have as good a command of the English language as you do?

Say: "I look forward to your reply."

As for those questions, that is up to you.

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Your next assignment is to briefly describe the weather in Karachi over the last few days. Has it been rainy? Sunny? Cloudy? Windy? Has the weather been enjoyable?

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Your next assignment is to briefly describe the weather in Karachi over the last few days. Has it been rainy? Sunny? Cloudy? Windy? Has the weather been enjoyable?

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Once again thank you RonBee.
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RonBee said:
Your next assignment is to briefly describe the weather in Karachi over the last few days. Has it been rainy? Sunny? Cloudy? Windy? Has the weather been enjoyable?

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"KARACHI WEATHER"
The weather in Karachi for the last few days is kind of hot, it’s sunny. Especially during the day time it’s too hot here but the evenings are windy. As a native Pakistani I won’t say one can enjoy here during the day time but yes evening’s are enjoyable.
In Karachi winter are for a short period but of enjoyable. Rainy and cloudy weather are usually in the month from June to August and are enjoyable as well.
Usually the weather of Karachi is moderate through all not too cold nor hot but now a days summer has started.

once again I look forward for you ah this time not reply but i may say correction :lol:
TC,
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kutekool_22 said:
kutekool_22 said:
RonBee said:
Your next assignment is to briefly describe the weather in Karachi over the last few days. Has it been rainy? Sunny? Cloudy? Windy? Has the weather been enjoyable?

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Once again thank you RonBee.
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"KARACHI WEATHER"
The weather in Karachi for the last few days is kind of hot, it’s sunny. Especially during the day time it’s too hot here but the evenings are windy. As a native Pakistani I won’t say one can enjoy here during the day time but yes evening’s are enjoyable.
In Karachi winter are for a short period but of enjoyable. Rainy and cloudy weather are usually in the month from June to August and are enjoyable as well.
Usually the weather of Karachi is moderate through all not too cold nor hot but now a days summer has started.

once again I look forward for you ah this time not reply but i may say correction :lol:
TC,
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That's not bad, but I do have a few suggestions for changes. For the first sentence, try:
  • The weather in Karachi for the last few days has been hot and sunny.
For the second sentence, try:
  • Especially during the daytime it’s too hot here, but the evenings are cool.
When you use but you have to contradict what came before in some way.



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kutekool_22 said:
"KARACHI WEATHER"
The weather in Karachi for the last few days is kind of hot, it’s sunny. Especially during the day time it’s too hot here but the evenings are windy. As a native Pakistani I won’t say one can enjoy here during the day time but yes evening’s are enjoyable.
In Karachi winter are for a short period but of enjoyable. Rainy and cloudy weather are usually in the month from June to August and are enjoyable as well.
Usually the weather of Karachi is moderate through all not too cold nor hot but now a days summer has started.

once again I look forward for you ah this time not reply but i may say correction :lol:
TC,
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Third sentence:
  • As a native Pakistani I won’t say one can enjoy here during the day time but yes evening’s are enjoyable.
Revision:
  • As a native Pakistani I won’t say one can enjoy the weather here during the daytime, but evenings are enjoyable.
As you can see, I didn't change much there, but especially note the change to evenings.
Fourth sentence:
  • In Karachi winter are for a short period but of enjoyable.
Revision:
  • In Karachi, winters are brief and mild.
For weather that is not severe, for weather that is not too hot and not too cold we usually say mild.
Fifth sentence:
  • Rainy and cloudy weather are usually in the month from June to August and are enjoyable as well.
Revision:
  • The months of June, July and August are the rainy season here. I like the rain, so I enjoy that season.
Since clouds come with rain you don't really need to mention cloudy. Also, since enjoyment is subjective I decided to personalize that somewhat. What do you think? :)
Sixth sentence:
  • Usually the weather of Karachi is moderate through all not too cold nor hot but now a days summer has started.
Revision:
  • Usually the weather in Karachi is mild--not too hot and not too cold--but summer has started, so we are expecting some hot days ahead.
What do you think? Any questions?

(Next you might want to talk about life in Karachi in general. If I were a visitor to Karachi what would be good for me to know about the place ahead of time?)

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