The car hit a bump at full speed

Bassim

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I am wondering if my sentences sound natural. Would you please correct my mistakes?

The car hit a bump at full speed and flew a few meters before landing with a crash. For a moment it almost stopped, and then it took up the speed again and vanished behind the corner, its tyres screeching squealing.
 

jutfrank

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These are errors:

the speed
screeching squealing
 

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Let me try the second time.

The car hit a bump at full speed and flew a few meters before landing with a crash. For a moment it almost stopped, and then it took up speed again and vanished behind the corner, its tyres screeching and squealing.
 

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I'd use a semicolon after "stopped" and remove the and that follows.

The car should vanish around the corner.
 
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