The condition of a patient has gone past the stage where it could be treated.

[tufguy]

1) The condition of a patient has gone past the stage where it could be treated.

2) The condition of a patient has gone past the ability of the doctors of saving him.

Please check my sentences.

 

[emsr2d2]

Why make them so wordy?

The patient's condition has become untreatable.

 

[tufguy]

Why make them so wordy?

The patient's condition has become untreatable.

Could you please tell me about my sentences as well? I mean are they wrong?

 

[emsr2d2]

#1 would be OK if you used "the", not "a". For this sentence to be uttered, the listener would already need to know which patient you're talking about.
#2 would be OK if you used "the" and changed the end to "... the ability of doctors to save him".

However, as I said, they're overly and unnecessarily wordy. You need to understand the difference between a grammatical sentence and a natural grammatical sentence.

 

[GoesStation]

Tufguy, it is possible to compose a long, perfectly grammatical, yet entirely and completely - not to mention thoroughly and decisively - unnatural sentence; a sentence which, even though it does not violate a single, solitary rule of English grammar, is nevertheless so utterly convoluted as to be one hundred percent unlikely ever to be heard spoken by a native English speaker.

Knowing how to do that is not a useful goal for an English learner.

 

[Matthew Wai]

Tufguy, would you use wordy sentences in your native language?
I usually write concisely in my native language and try to do the same in English.