The condition of a patient has gone past the stage where it could be treated.

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1) The condition of a patient has gone past the stage where it could be treated.

2) The condition of a patient has gone past the ability of the doctors of saving him.

Please check my sentences.
 

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Why make them so wordy?

The patient's condition has become untreatable.
 

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Why make them so wordy?

The patient's condition has become untreatable.

Could you please tell me about my sentences as well? I mean are they wrong?
 

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#1 would be OK if you used "the", not "a". For this sentence to be uttered, the listener would already need to know which patient you're talking about.
#2 would be OK if you used "the" and changed the end to "... the ability of doctors to save him".

However, as I said, they're overly and unnecessarily wordy. You need to understand the difference between a grammatical sentence and a natural grammatical sentence.
 

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Tufguy, it is possible to compose a long, perfectly grammatical, yet entirely and completely - not to mention thoroughly and decisively - unnatural sentence; a sentence which, even though it does not violate a single, solitary rule of English grammar, is nevertheless so utterly convoluted as to be one hundred percent unlikely ever to be heard spoken by a native English speaker.

Knowing how to do that is not a useful goal for an English learner.
 

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Tufguy, would you use wordy sentences in your native language?
I usually write concisely in my native language and try to do the same in English.
 
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