The emperor lived an easy life

Bassim

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I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural. Would you please correct my mistakes?

The emperor lived an easy life surrounded by concubines, artists and a large number of sycophants, until the messenger from the border town arrived, telling him that hordes of mercenaries gathered on the border with the aim of removing him from power.
 

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The hordes were gathering.
 

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or "had gathered."
Also, put a comma after "life".
 
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