[Grammar] The moment after receiving

[Oceanlike]

Is any of these sentences written wrongly, grammatically?

(a) They set off for the camp site immediately after receiving Jody's call.

(b) The moment after receiving Jody's call, they set off for the camp site.

I think (a) is fine, but I'm unsure about (b).

Thank you! :-D

 

[emsr2d2]

I don't like b) either. I'm not sure why you changed "immediately" to "The moment after". b) would be better if it started "Immediately after receiving".

 

[Oceanlike]

I don't like b) either. I'm not sure why you changed "immediately" to "The moment afte".

I was trying a synthesis exercise, and I had to start with "The moment....."

I don't like the 'sound' of (b). However, I'm wondering if it is incorrect grammatically, or it simply doesn't sound right?

Thank you!

 

[emsr2d2]

Hmm, if they set off as soon as they heard from her, I'd start with "The moment Jody phoned, ...". However, that loses the idea that they finished the call before setting off. Maybe this would work:
The moment they finished talking to Jody on the phone, they set off for the campsite.