The morning after a night out

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Bassim

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I am not sure if my sentence is grammatically correct. Would you please correct the mistakes?

The morning after a night out, Maria's head was still spinning from the drinks she downed, and her body was hurting from dancing all night.
 

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It's OK. I'd use "she had downed/drunk".
 

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How about aching instead of hurting?
 

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Unless she was dancing in a really energetic way, throwing her whole body around the dance floor, it's probably more likely that it would be just her feet that were hurting from dancing all night.
 

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I think it might be the drink that is causing pain, which makes me favour ache.
 

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I agree that her whole body (particularly her head) might be hurting/aching due to the amount of alcohol imbibed, but the original sentence specifically linked the pain to the dancing.
 

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I think I will repeat my sentence after emsr2d2's correction to avoid any misunderstanding, and also as an exercise.

The morning after the night out, Maria's head was still spinning from the drinks she had downed, and her feet were hurting from dancing all night.
 

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I'm happy with that. The fact that her head was still spinning rather than aching suggests that she was still slightly drunk, not yet hung over.
 
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