The number of restaurant in the city is disproportionate/not proportional to the size

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Jit833

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1) The number of restaurant in the city is disproportionate/ not proportional to the population size.

2) The number of restaurant are higher than the number of customers and it causes the customer to scatter/cause the customer to be segmented with each restaurant has less customer.



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Are the above sentences written correctly? Please advise.
 

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1) The number of restaurant in the city is disproportionate/ not proportional to the population size.

2) The number of restaurant are higher than the number of customers and it causes the customer to scatter/cause the customer to be segmented with each restaurant has less customer.



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Are the above sentences written correctly? Please advise.

1 is OK as "The number of restaurants is disproportionate to the size of the population" although that doesn't tell you whether there are too many or too few restaurants.
2 is messy, overly wordy and not natural at all. Neither "scatter" nor "to be segmented" work here (the latter doesn't really work anywhere).

I would go with something simple like:

- There are more restaurants than necessary given the size of the population.
- The city has more restaurants than necessary.
- The city has too many restaurants and they suffer from a lack of customers.
 
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