The official meeting between two

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I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct. Do I need a comma after "hours"?

The official meeting between two leaders was planned for two hours but went on for three more. They ended up playing golf on the president's golf course and drinking champagne.
 

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I'd use "was due to last [for] two hours. When I read "The meeting ... was planned for two ...", I expected the next word to be "o'clock".
I just want to check that you do mean it actually lasted five hours.
You don't need to repeat the word "golf" in the second half.
Did they drink champagne after playing golf?
 

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Yes. I meant that the meeting lasted five hours.
I imagined them playing golf and drinking champagne at the same time, in between their rounds.
 

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In that case, I'd use "They ended up drinking champagne while playing golf on the president's [private] course". I've changed the order of activities so that "golf" stays close to "course".
 

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emsr2d2,
Excuse me for asking again. I am just wondering if you know which synonym could be used in the above sentence instead of "end up" with the similar meaning. I am asking just to know and to vary my language if I ever need to write something similar.
 

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You could say "... actually lasted five hours/lasted three more".
 

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emsr 2d2,

I was wondering not about the time but about "end up." Is there any synonym I could use instead of "end up"?
 

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This reads like the second sentence of a news report. I imagine something like this: The president of Nambia met with the Covfefian president today. The meeting between the two leaders was planned for two hours but went on for three more. They ended their cordial encounter on the president's golf course where they played nine holes before having a drink at the "nineteenth hole".

You can see that this time I felt the sentence demanded the definite article - provided the presidents had already been mentioned.
 
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