The president caused a scandal

Bassim

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I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural.

The president caused a scandal by suggesting the attractive TV host in a live broadcast she could join his team whenever she got bored with her current job on TV.
 

emsr2d2

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I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural.

The president caused a scandal by suggesting the attractive TV host in a live broadcast [STRIKE]she[/STRIKE] could join his team [STRIKE]whenever[/STRIKE] if she [ever] [strike]she[/strike] got bored with her current job on TV.

See above.
 
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I was going to add "[that]" but changed my mind. In BrE, it's OK without it.
 

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I would say:

The President caused a scandal by suggesting to the attractive TV host on a live broadcast that if she ever got bored with her current job that she could join his team.
 

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I'd replace the second "that" with a comma.
 
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