The truck loaded with biscuits crashed

[Bassim]

Would you please correct the mistakes in my sentence? Do you say "rushed out" or "outside"? I have used BrE "packet"

The truck loaded with biscuits crashed close to the school, causing tumult among the students who rushed out to help themselves with packets.

 

[emsr2d2]

Would you please correct the mistakes in my sentence? Do you say "rushed out" or "outside"? I have used BrE "packet"

[STRIKE]The[/STRIKE] A truck loaded with biscuits crashed close to the school, causing [STRIKE]tumult[/STRIKE] chaos among the students who rushed out to help themselves [STRIKE]with[/STRIKE] to packets.

See above.

 

[Bassim]

emsr2d2,
Excuse me for asking again. I am wondering why "tumult" is not right in the above sentence.

 

[teechar]

I would probably use "excitement" or "a frenzy" instead of "tumult", and I would say "help themselves to the packets".