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Dr. Jamshid Ibrahim

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The Well
The Pitcher and the Basin
I came to a well which looked like a fountain set deep in a pit. There were already some women there who carried water home from the well in water jugs or canisters balanced on their heads. These canisters were re-used oil canisters and food tins. Some of the women were young and beautiful, in dresses of different colours and styles. The pearls on their necklaces were chosen at random. Some were single as if their shining dress colours were pursuing young men. The water and the girls were clear and pure. The ice cold water was equally refreshing. You could see its drops mingle with the girls' pearls in water. The presence of even a boy there was seen as intrusion on this angelic haven.

I didn’t know about it so I went there. I was the only urban boy in the village and felt superior. One of the boys said: My sister goes there every day. She said: a girl has fallen in love with the urban boy but please don’t tell anybody about it. When I went there the other girls laughed, she was deeply embarrassed and couldn’t raise her head. I went to drink water because I was thirsty. Yes, I was often thirsty. Whenever I was home I didn’t drink tap water but drank from a basin placed under an amphora or a pitcher.

I saw the girls on their way home late one afternoon but couldn’t ask them to give me some water. I stopped and listened to their singing. Their clear voices filled the sky. Then I plucked some courage and asked: "Please girls, I am thirsty, give me some water. Go away urban boy", they said „our water doesn’t quench your thirst“. I said: Please girls, I am thirsty, show me your beautiful eyes. Go away you poor urban boy, our eyes are as beautiful as those of gazelles. I had no more courage so I went back home thirsty. When the doctors came they said: He died of thirst.
 
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Women! You can't live with them, and you can't live without them. ;-)

I have a couple of minor suggestions:

girls' pearls
Their clear voices


I said: "Please girls! I am thirsty. Show me your beautiful eyes."
"Go away you poor urban boy," they said. "Our eyes are as beautiful as those of gazelles." I had no more courage, so I went back home thirsty.
What do you think?
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Women! You can't live with them, and you can't live without them. ;-)

I have a couple of minor suggestions:

girls' pearls
Their clear voices


I said: "Please girls! I am thirsty. Show me your beautiful eyes."
"Go away you poor urban boy," they said. "Our eyes are as beautiful as those of gazelles." I had no more courage, so I went back home thirsty.
What do you think?
:)

Thanks Ron. Yes, you are right:
1. if girl is in plural. I must admit I had only one girl in mind although I used the plural. I changed it

2. Their voice not voices by license was supposed to show their voices merging into one voice. OK I changed it.
3. I didn't ask for more: Ron the grey line between showing courage and harassment is indeed sometimes very thin. Originally I wanted to go even further.

Please Ron write whatever you think should be changed. Your feedback is important.

This is a Middle Eastern version of Coleridge's "Water, water everywhere". But maybe Coleridge got it from there. Ben Johnson wrote:
So court a mistress she denies you
Let her alone she will court you

But I believe this is not what I wanted to say. What do you think of the pearls chosen at random? I mean natural beauty. Colours don't need to match.
 
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I said: Please girls, I am thirsty, show me your beautiful eyes. Go away you

So nice, is it your writing? (if you don't mind, of course)

 

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I said: Please girls, I am thirsty, show me your beautiful eyes. Go away you

So nice, is it your writing? (if you don't mind, of course)


Thanks sum1. I am not sure whether I understand your question. All the texts I post here are my own ie I write them personally. But maybe you wanted to know something else.
 

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Thanks Ron. Yes, you are right:
1. if girl is in plural. I must admit I had only one girl in mind although I used the plural. I changed it

2. Their voice not voices by license was supposed to show their voices merging into one voice. OK I changed it.
3. I didn't ask for more: Ron the grey line between showing courage and harassment is indeed sometimes very thin. Originally I wanted to go even further.

Please Ron write whatever you think should be changed. Your feedback is important.

This is a Middle Eastern version of Coleridge's "Water, water everywhere". But maybe Coleridge got it from there. Ben Johnson wrote:
So court a mistress she denies you
Let her alone she will court you

But I believe this is not what I wanted to say. What do you think of the pearls chosen at random? I mean natural beauty. Colours don't need to match.
I like the story. Yes, I remember about the pearls. (I didn't reread it before writing this.) My feeling is that they are worn to accentuate the natural beauty of the girls. (Not very insightful, I guess.) The girls somehow seem real to me. On that basis I would have to say it is a well-told story.

:)
 

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I like the story. Yes, I remember about the pearls. (I didn't reread it before writing this.) My feeling is that they are worn to accentuate the natural beauty of the girls. (Not very insightful, I guess.) The girls somehow seem real to me. On that basis I would have to say it is a well-told story.

:)

Randomness doesn't only accentuate the natural beauty Ron it is a philosophy and divinity in one. Randomness can occur in physics, biology, mathmatics and information science. Randomness is unpredictable cannot be determined. It is associated with free will. It is a game without rules. It reflects the true human nature. It defies anything civilized or well organised. It is simple and genuine. There are no standards. Rural life is not spoiled. Everything is pure. There is no tap water but a well. Well water is more preciouss than tap water because it is pure. Only water in its natural habitat symbolizes life and love.
 
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Hello Jamshid,

Your description is an ethnographic one. it reminds me of coutries where I have seen this scene. Girls are in charge of water. It's a hard job, especially when the well is far. A symbolic is behind this act.
I also recall Arabic poems but I can't tell you which poet neither the poems.

Both are pure: the girl and the water. Both are thirsty of love: the urban and the countrywoman.

This essay is a romantic one, Jamshid. I could close my eyes and see the play.
 

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Thanks sum1. I am not sure whether I understand your question. All the texts I post here are my own ie I write them personally. But maybe you wanted to know something else.


Hi
that's what I meant, that all the texts you post here are your own,
Well said, (especially when you said I'm thirsty......)
it's well said and full of unsaid
I wish one day I'll be able to write the way you do:hi:
 

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Thanks Kaya. Part of the story is my own experience. I cupped my hands to drink water because there was no cup. True it was a hard job but still romantic. Often boys sopped girls on their way to get water. This text is full of symbols: colour, water, pearls, randomness, thirst...... I am glad you can live the story with eyes closed.
 
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Dr. Jamshid Ibrahim

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Hi
when you said I'm thirsty......)
it's well said and full of unsaid


Yes, Sum1 a lot is implied. There is more unsaid than said. A nice idea thanks. BTW this is what I believe in. The reader reads the unsaid/unwritten more than what is said/written.
 
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