There was an old guy in the hospital. Who was trying to enter the queue illicitly.

[tufguy]

1) There was an old guy in the hospital. Who was trying to enter the queue illicitly.

2) A guy entered in the middle of the queue without being in the queue to be checked earlier than others.

3) Don't try to enter the "line" or "queue" illicitly. You need to come serial wise. Go and stand at the end of the queue or stand behind the last person in the queue to be checked by the doctor.

Please check my sentences.

 

[GoesStation]

Number 1 is not two sentences.

Look for examples of the expression "cut the queue" and see if you can revise number 2 based on what you find.

The first two sentences in number 3 don't work. The last one contains two possible acceptable sentences.

 

[GoesStation]

3) Don't try to enter the "line" or "queue" illicitly. You need to come serial wise.

"Illicitly" is not the right word here. It's generally used to refer to legally-prohibited activities or activities prohibited by formal rules. Cutting a queue violates social norms but doesn't rise to the level of "illicit" activity.

"Serial-wise" doesn't exist. Look up the phrase "in order".

Go and stand at the end of the queue or stand behind the last person in the queue to be checked by the doctor.

That would be an extremely odd thing to say to someone. I think you're actually trying to suggest two possible sentences. If that's the case, please post them.

 

[tufguy]

"Illicitly" is not the right word here. It's generally used to refer to legally-prohibited activities or activities prohibited by formal rules. Cutting a queue violates social norms but doesn't rise to the level of "illicit" activity.

"Serial-wise" doesn't exist. Look up the phrase "in order".


That would be an extremely odd thing to say to someone. I think you're actually trying to suggest two possible sentences. If that's the case, please post them.

1) There was an old guy in the hospital who was trying to "cut in the 'queue' or 'line'" or "jump the queue".

2) A guy cut in the middle of the queue without being in the queue to be seen by doctors earlier than others.

3) Don't try to "cut in the queue" or "jump the queue" . You need to come in order. Go and stand at the end of the queue or stand behind the last person in the queue to be checked by the doctor. (I do not say what is the correct way to say this sentence.)


Could you please tell me what do you mean by "please post them"?

 

[emsr2d2]

You have used an awful lot of words to say "At the hospital/doctor's surgery, don't jump the queue".

 

[GoesStation]

Could you please tell me what do you mean by "please post them"?

I wanted you to put your sentences into a new message.

 

[tufguy]

I wanted you to put your sentences into a new message.

I don't understand.

 

[GoesStation]

I think you're actually trying to suggest two possible sentences. If that's the case, please post them.

I wanted you to put your sentences into a new message.

I don't understand.

I wanted you to write two separate sentences instead of the sentence you wrote where you proposed two alternatives with the word "or" between them. Once you have written those sentences, you can post them to this thread.

 

[Tdol]

You can also use push in the queue in BrE in these circumstances.

 

[tufguy]

You can also use push in the queue in BrE in these circumstances.

He was trying to cut into the queue.

He was trying to push into the queue.

He was trying to jump the queue.

Are these sentences correct?

 

[Tdol]

They sound fine to me. ;-)

 

[GoesStation]

He was trying to cut into the queue.

He was trying to push into the queue.

He was trying to jump the queue.

Excellent! Do you see how much better these short sentences are than the originals? Remember to review everything you write. Remove every word you can. The French philosopher Blaise Pascal once apologized for writing such a long letter, saying I would have written a shorter letter, but I did not have the time. He meant that it takes more effort to convey your intended meaning in fewer words. The effort is worthwhile, though.