Thesis Statement

[raelynn]

Hi, I have a essay coming up and I need a good beginning Thesis.
The essay is " look back and evaluate some part of your life" I thought of using this:
When I think back on my life, my mind drifts back to my days in public schools and my love of music. I remember the first day of my second grade at the (name)Catholic School.

Is this a good thesis or is it still to broad?

 

[RonBee]

A thesis is a paper on some subject, so that is not a thesis. However, it does look like a good beginning of a self-descriptive type essay. I would be interested in seeing the rest.