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[Allen165]

"Please accept my application for a position as an assistant at the Chair for XXX. This position drew my interest because...."

Would you have used "this"? "This" struck me as inappropriate when I read it, but I can't explain why. Perhaps it would've been better to write "the said position," although that might be too formal.

Thanks.

 

[emsr2d2]

"Please accept my application for a position as an assistant at the Chair for XXX. This position drew my interest because...."

Would you have used "this"? "This" struck me as inappropriate when I read it, but I can't explain why. Perhaps it would've been better to write "the said position," although that might be too formal.

Thanks.

I would simply go with "The position..." It's clear which position you're talking about it because you mentioned it by name in the first sentence.

 

[Heterological]

It doesn't strike me as inappropriate.

 

[Abstract Idea]

"Please accept my application for a position as an assistant at the Chair for XXX. This position drew my interest because...."

Would you have used "this"? "This" struck me as inappropriate when I read it, but I can't explain why. Perhaps it would've been better to write "the said position," although that might be too formal.

Thanks.

Although I do not find it inappropriate, I wouldn't have written it this way.
After thinking about "such position", "that position", "the afore mentioned position" and so forth, I guess I would have decided on a passive voice version:
"Please accept my application for a position as an assistant at the Chair for XXX. My interest on this position has been drawn by ..."
or something similar