Three robbers, dressed as Father Christmas

Bassim

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I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

Three robbers, dressed as Father Christmas, rushed out of the bank, carrying plastic bags filled with the money. They got into a car parked on the opposite side of the street and drove off at high speed under the eyes of astounded passersby.
 

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I wouldn't use "under the eyes of".

... drove off at high speed to the astonishment of [watching] passersby.
 

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I'd say 'plastic bags filled with money'.
 

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"Filled with the money" makes the reader wonder, "which money?" You can include the article if a previous sentence said something like "Terrified clerks shoved handfuls of cash into plastic bags." Otherwise, omit it.
 
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