[Grammar] Tim's hair was wild was from the shock of electricity.

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Ferdie11

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Hi,

Is this grammatically correct?

Tim's hair was wild was from the shock of electricity.

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... with static electricity.

Once you have received a shock, the electricity has passed through you. (Probably not the right description if you are a physicist, but I just mean, the action is past.)

If you have a lot of static, your hair will stand up.

If you are in a lightning storm and your hair starts to stand up, you are in a lot of danger!
 

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... with static electricity.

Once you have received a shock, the electricity has passed through you. (Probably not the right description if you are a physicist, but I just mean, the action is past.)

If you have a lot of static, your hair will stand up.

If you are in a lightning storm and your hair starts to stand up, you are in a lot of danger!

Thanks. So, the sentence is correct?
 

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I recommend changing "from the shock of electricity" to "with static electricity."
 
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