undertaken, fulfillment of corrective measures

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KLPNO

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Hello everyone
I'd like to ask if I chose the right words for the following sentence:

Measurements of noise levels are undertaken, but there is no control over fulfillment of corrective measures, which, in turn, does not guarantee that workplaces meet sanitary norms and rules.

The words I'm not sure of are "undertaken" and "fulfillment of corrective measures".
 

cclaff

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Hello everyone
I'd like to ask if I chose the right words for the following sentence:

Measurements of noise levels are undertaken, but there is no control over fulfillment of corrective measures, which, in turn, does not guarantee that workplaces meet sanitary norms and rules.

The words I'm not sure of are "undertaken" and "fulfillment of corrective measures".
I would change it to read:

"Noise levels are measured, but there is no control over corrective measures to be undertaken. In turn, this means that there is no guarantee that workplaces meet health standards and rules."

"Sanitary" often implies the control of contamination, not usually noise.
 

KLPNO

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I would change it to read:

"Noise levels are measured, but there is no control over corrective measures to be undertaken. In turn, this means that there is no guarantee that workplaces meet health standards and rules."

"Sanitary" often implies the control of contamination, not usually noise.
Thank you very much, cclaff!
 
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