until hatred grew out of it

novar

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Can I say these in English?
She noticed how her dislike became visibly greater until hatred grew out of it.
She noticed how her dislike became visibly greater until it turned into hatred.
She noticed how her dislike rapidly growing until it turned into hatred.
 
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It's always helpful to have examples numbered for easy reference.

1. She noticed how her dislike became visibly greater until hatred grew out of it.
2. She noticed how her dislike became visibly greater until it turned into hatred.
3. She noticed how her dislike rapidly growing until it turned into hatred.


The problem with #1 and #2 is "visibly". In the sentence, only she is noticing her dislike and its progression, so it's not 'visible'. Take away that word, and #1 and #2 work just fine. I prefer #2 with the change.

In #3, "She noticed..." past tense. "Growing..." present continuous. "Turned..." past tense. This doesn't work. There are two solutions:

a. She noticed [STRIKE]how[/STRIKE] her dislike rapidly growing until it turned into hatred.
b. She noticed how her dislike rapidly grew until it turned into hatred.
 
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