What are loose sentences? Periodic sentences?

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What are loose sentences? Periodic sentences? Combination sentences?

Loose sentences
Here's one of mine:
  • John was happy that as a result of hard work for the first time ever he got an A on his report card.
What do you think? May I see one of yours?


Periodic sentences

Here's one of mine:
  • As a result of celebrating and drinking too much champagne, John was drunk.
What do you think? May I see one of yours?


combination sentences



Write some loose sentences, some periodic sentences, and some combination sentences. Feel free to post some of them here.
 

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Loose sentence:

She agreed to marry him, live with him and go through all that life threw at them at his side. ;-0
 

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tdol said:
Loose sentence:

She agreed to marry him, live with him and go through all that life threw at them at his side. ;-0

You might want to rewrite that. It's a little confusing, especially the ending.

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Too loose? ;-0
 

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tdol said:
Too loose? ;-0

Maybe. :wink:

I think I know what the problem is.
  • She agreed to marry him, live with him and go through all that life threw at them at his side.
I think what throws the reader is all that life threw at them etc. For one thing, you have live (present tense), go (present tense), then threw (past tense). Perhaps:
  • She agreed to marry him, live with him and go to the ends of the earth with him.

What do you think? :)

(I'm not sure that sentence fits the pattern anyhow, but I'll ask Cas to comment.)

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I'll look tomorrow. I'm afraid I must go now as I've just put my back out and am in agony. good night. ;-)
 

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tdol said:
I'll look tomorrow. I'm afraid I must go now as I've just put my back out and am in agony. good night. ;-)

I am sorry to hear that. Hopefully, by the time you read this you will be feeling better.

:)
 
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