When the intoxicated singer forgot his text

Bassim

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Would you please correct the mistakes in my sentences?

When the intoxicated singer forgot his text, the audience booed him off stage and threw bottles and shoes at the band. They were chased away and told never to come back again.
 
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He forgot his lyrics.

The "they" in your second sentence is ambiguous. Was the band chased away or the audience?
 

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It was of course the band. I used "they" to avoid using "band" twice. Should I writer instead: "The musicians were chased away..."
 
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Would you please correct the mistakes in my sentences?

When the intoxicated singer forgot his [STRIKE]text[/STRIKE] lyrics/words, the audience booed him off stage and threw bottles and shoes at the band,[STRIKE]. They were chased[/STRIKE] before chasing them away and [STRIKE]told[/STRIKE] telling them never to come back again.

See above.
 
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