When the manager came on the stage

Bassim

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I am wondering if my sentence is grammatically correct.

When the manager came on the stage to tell the audience that the lead actor was sick and would be replaced by a young, promising actor, he was met by jeers and calls, "Fraud!"
 

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I am wondering if my sentence is grammatically correct.

When the manager came on [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] stage to tell the audience that the lead actor was sick and would be replaced by a young, promising actor, he was met [STRIKE]by[/STRIKE] with jeers and [STRIKE]calls,[/STRIKE] shouts of "Fraud!"

See above. I'd probably use "his announcement" rather than "he".
 
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