Which of these sentences flow better?

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Kakashiprince

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Do any of these sentences makes sense? (which one do you prefer?)


My family history suggests that I am prone to diabetes; therefore, I want to teach myself and others to be healthy - especially by giving others advices like patients in Mt. Sinai hospital where patients I worked with were diabetic.

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My family history suggests that I am prone to diabetes; therefore, I want to teach myself and others to be healthy. For instance, giving advices to diabetic patients in Mt. Sinai hospital whom I worked with.

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My family history suggests that I am prone to diabetes; therefore, I want to teach myself and others to be healthy - especially patients in Mt. Sinai hospital where patients I worked with were diabetic.
 

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My family history suggests that I am prone to diabetes; therefore, I want to teach myself and others to be healthy - especially patients in Mt. Sinai hospital, where patients I worked with were diabetic.
That's OK with the comma.
 
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