Kakashiprince
Member
- Joined
- Jul 3, 2012
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Vietnamese
- Home Country
- Canada
- Current Location
- Canada
Do any of these sentences makes sense? (which one do you prefer?)
My family history suggests that I am prone to diabetes; therefore, I want to teach myself and others to be healthy - especially by giving others advices like patients in Mt. Sinai hospital where patients I worked with were diabetic.
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My family history suggests that I am prone to diabetes; therefore, I want to teach myself and others to be healthy. For instance, giving advices to diabetic patients in Mt. Sinai hospital whom I worked with.
or
My family history suggests that I am prone to diabetes; therefore, I want to teach myself and others to be healthy - especially patients in Mt. Sinai hospital where patients I worked with were diabetic.
My family history suggests that I am prone to diabetes; therefore, I want to teach myself and others to be healthy - especially by giving others advices like patients in Mt. Sinai hospital where patients I worked with were diabetic.
or
My family history suggests that I am prone to diabetes; therefore, I want to teach myself and others to be healthy. For instance, giving advices to diabetic patients in Mt. Sinai hospital whom I worked with.
or
My family history suggests that I am prone to diabetes; therefore, I want to teach myself and others to be healthy - especially patients in Mt. Sinai hospital where patients I worked with were diabetic.