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KLPNO

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Hello everyone

I'd like to ask if the word order in the following sentences is correct:

1. Many sections and divisions of my department depend on how fast I act and how accurate are data I give.

2. Effective organization of training depends on how good is a training plan we compile, including a term of conduction, etc.
 

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1. Many sections and divisions of my department depend on how fast I act and how accurate data are I supply/provide ( I don't know if you wish to change these words, they sound better in my opinion.)

2. Effective organization of training depends on how good a training plan is we compile, including a term of conduction, etc.
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naomimalan

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Hello everyone

I'd like to ask if the word order in the following sentences is correct:

1. Many sections and divisions of my department depend on how fast I act and how accurate are data I give.

2. Effective organization of training depends on how good is a training plan we compile, including a term of conduction, etc.

Strictly speaking, you should not use the word order for questions in a clause that is not a question. In how accurate are data I give and how good is a training plan we compile you have used the word order for question by placing the verb before the subject of the how clause..

However, if you respect the normal word order in your two sentences it sounds awkward. This is because both sentences have relative clauses (I give and we compile) which means placing the verbs (are and is respectively) after the relative clause – too far away from the subject each one goes with.

So you have two options:

-keep them the way they are; plenty of people ignore this rule (NB the training plan, not a training plan)
-change the wording, although it could affect the meaning slightly e.g.:

Many sections and divisions of my department depend on how fast I act and on the accuracy of the data I give.

Effective organization of training depends on the quality of the training plan we compile…

Either way, I can’t see exactly how this fits in: including a term of conduction :-D:-D
 
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