Would you correct this new essay?

[aleycris]

Hi, it's my again. Now I have a essay about science and not science activities.
What do you think about it?

Beyond Science

There are a lot of activities that the people believe that it have some relation with the science.
In my opinion there few activities that have some science meaning. For example I believe that telepathy would be produce with a brain’s power increase and that increase I think is produce by some science reason. Another activity is psychokinesis, I think that this can be possible if you increase the power of your mind, this activity have a strong relation with the telepathy because both use the mind.
Other activities like magic power or fortune telling, do not have some relation with science. From my point of view, this kind of activities try to play with the people because it say something that produce some influence in the each person and then that person believe that is true. I do not believe that some person could cure ills with only put his on some part of the body.
Apart form that, there are some activities that have religious meaning like reincarnation, superstition or ghost.
In conclusion, this activities or topics might have or not some science relation and you can believe or not it. Depends on the person the result of this activities, if you believe probably you would have good result.

Cheers
Alejandro

 

[RonBee]

We might wind up taking this one sentence at a time.

There are a lot of activities that the people believe that it have some relation with the science.

• There are a lot of activities that people believe have something to do with science.

(Say: "It's me again.")

I'll be back later.

 

[RonBee]

This is tough, so be patient. :wink:

In my opinion there few activities that have some science meaning.

Perhaps:

• In my opinion, there are a few activities that have scientific relevance.

For example I believe that telepathy would be produce with a brain’s power increase and that increase I think is produce by some science reason.

Perhaps:

• For example I believe that telepathy could be produced by an increase in brainpower, and that increase could be produced by new technology created by scientists.

Hm.

Another activity is psychokinesis, I think that this can be possible if you increase the power of your mind, this activity have a strong relation with the telepathy because both use the mind.

• Something else that could be produced by the application of science is telekinesis. Telekinesis and telepathy are related because both are created by mental activity.

Other activities like magic power or fortune telling, do not have some relation with science.

• Other activities like magic or fortune-telling are not scientific.

From my point of view, this kind of activities try to play with the people because it say something that produce some influence in the each person and then that person believe that is true.

• From my point of view, these kinds of activities are nothing more than trickery, fraud, and flimflam. They have nothing to do with real science, but their only purpose is to fool people.

I do not believe that some person could cure ills with only put his on some part of the body

• I do not believe that some people can cure sickness by laying on of the hands.

Apart form that, there are some activities that have religious meaning like reincarnation, superstition or ghost.

• Then there are areas where the supernatural world interacts with the natural world--things like reincarnation, superstition and ghosts.

In conclusion, this activities or topics might have or not some science relation and you can believe or not it. Depends on the person the result of this activities, if you believe probably you would have good result.

• In conclusion, these activities might have some relationship to science and they might not.

How did I do? Did I ruin it?

:wink:

 

[aleycris]

I think is pretty clear, and you say that I said in a easy way

 

[RonBee]

I'm glad I could help.