Please correct my paragraph

[lonly]

Hi , I am Ali from the earth. How are you. I am so happy to be with you in this

amazing and useful forum. I write this paragraph to measure my second language

level. I have started my learning before one year ago. My listening improves

every day, writing and speaking too. not just i like the English language, but I

respect the west civilization and principles. I want to live in California-USA or

in London - England. It is just a dream. another thing, I have some hobbies and

skills, I love the poem and I wrote some poetries (just tryings).

Finally, I wish someday I will speak English, and my language will release my

pains, then the winds will take them away ... away.

Thank you for your time and attention.

Lovely - Ali

 

[simin alavizadeh]

Hi , I am Ali from the earth. How are you. I am so happy to be with you in this

amazing and useful forum. I write this paragraph to measure my second language

level. I have started learning English before one year ago. My listening , writing, and speaking is improving. not only i like the English language, but also I

respect the west civilization and principles. I want to live in California-USA or

in London - England. It is just a dream. By the way, I have some hobbies and

skills, I love the poem and I wrote some poetries (just tryings).

Finally, I wish one day I will speak English, and my language will release my

pains, then the wind will take them away ... away.

Thank you for your time and attention.

Lovely - Ali

I'm not an expert but I hope it'll help.

 

[lonly]

Simin Alavizadeh

Thank you very much

your notes are right

and they helped me

thank you honey

I fell that i want huge you

Lovely ... your pupil Ali