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Gaya87

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Can anyone check my grammatical mistakes? Thank you.

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An auto driver finds a child of a man who is killed and burnt; he tries to get justice for the dead man, but is failed by a corrupt lawyer and the judicial system.

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Selvam contesting in a rickshaw race along with fellow rickshaw drivers. Meanwhile elsewhere Manikkum, a man with his child, Soussi is being chased by a thug. The man is killed and he is burnt. Selvam finds the kid and goes in search of justice but is failed by the judicial system by a corrupt lawyer.
 

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It's quite confusing. In the first one the man is an auto driver. In the second one he is a rickshaw driver. While he is participating in a rickshaw race the other man is killed, and the killer burns the body. We don't know how the man met the child. That's a mystery. And how did the lawyer come into the picture?
 

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How about this:

A rickshaw puller, who also enjoys racing with other rickshaw pullers, finds a child whose father has been killed. All his attempts to seek justice for the man are thwarted by a corrupt lawyer.
 

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A rickshaw puller, who also enjoys racing with other rickshaw pullers, finds a child whose father has been killed. All his attempts to seek justice for the man are thwarted by a corrupt lawyer.

There is only the child left after the father has been killed. Who is "the man"?
 

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Perhaps:

A rickshaw puller, who likes to race in rickshaw races, encounters a child whose father (a complete stranger to him) has been killed in a robbery. He seeks justice for the dead man. His efforts, however, come to naught because of a corrupt lawyer.

I wouldn't say he "found" a child. (Was he looking for one?) People generally assume, I think, that if a person is racing that person is racing with other people. Don't use "also" unless you are adding something to something else.
 
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