ambitious-girl
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Hello all,
Could someone please check this paragraph for any mistakes?
There are some consequences of unemployment, ranging from those that affect the individual and his or her family to those that have an impact on the unemployed‘s mental health. Loss of income may be considered to be/be perceived as the most devastating effect of losing jobs. This will result in experiencing a decline in living standards that can significantly contribute to tension-filled family environment as well as continual arguments and quarrels between family members. Having been out of work, the unemployed may gradually be developing negative attitudes towards everything in their lives. Feeling unworthy, losing sense of purpose and having low self-esteem can follow mainly from job losses.
Because I wanted to use something new and different, and I was not sure which of the phrase in bold was better I put both of them.
Having been out of work-> Because they have been out of work. I wanted to use reduce adverb clause of perfect tense.
Could someone please check this paragraph for any mistakes?
There are some consequences of unemployment, ranging from those that affect the individual and his or her family to those that have an impact on the unemployed‘s mental health. Loss of income may be considered to be/be perceived as the most devastating effect of losing jobs. This will result in experiencing a decline in living standards that can significantly contribute to tension-filled family environment as well as continual arguments and quarrels between family members. Having been out of work, the unemployed may gradually be developing negative attitudes towards everything in their lives. Feeling unworthy, losing sense of purpose and having low self-esteem can follow mainly from job losses.
Because I wanted to use something new and different, and I was not sure which of the phrase in bold was better I put both of them.
Having been out of work-> Because they have been out of work. I wanted to use reduce adverb clause of perfect tense.
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