hatimhussain
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I wrote this story to find out my mistakes in;
Please guide me.
1. Katherine, the housekeeper, was shocked when Martha forbade her to come to work in her house anymore.
2. “Ma'am, if you fired me how would I feed my four kids. Being a widow and only breadwinner, I am totally dependent on what I earn from this house and from the house of your next door neighbor, Josephine. She also has hinted me a couple of times not to come because of this Corona-virus.” Katherine said this last sentence in the hope of seeking considerations from Martha.
3. “That’s what I want you to realize. No one is ready to take risk against this Corona-virus.” Martha was more assertive this time. Katherine cursed herself why she disclosed Josephine’s intention to Martha. It certainly had supported Martha’s stance.
4. “Ma'am I cover my face with a mask all the time and the first thing I do is rinse my hands with a sanitizer as soon as I come here”; she tried to convince Martha. Martha ignored her. "Distancing from one another is the only way to protect ourselves from the virus", said Martha.
5. “You see I do not have cold, cough, fever or any other symptoms of this disease”; she again tried to bring Martha around. “I am sorry Katherine, in these circumstances, I cannot let you come here and that’s final. I advise you to stay at home and wait unless the Corona-virus is gone.”
6. “What about Suzy, she pointed to Martha’s seven-year old daughter. She is quite attached to me and needs my presence in the absence of you and your husband.” This time Katherine was sure to get a favorable response from Martha.
7. “You need not worry about her since Joseph and I remain in the house these days due to the lock-down, so we can manage Suzy’s responsibilities as well as of the household.” Martha remained firm in her decision.
8. After losing in arguments with Martha, Katherine left Martha’s house with teary-eyes.
- The usage of tenses.
- The usage of vocabulary
- Orderliness
Please guide me.
1. Katherine, the housekeeper, was shocked when Martha forbade her to come to work in her house anymore.
2. “Ma'am, if you fired me how would I feed my four kids. Being a widow and only breadwinner, I am totally dependent on what I earn from this house and from the house of your next door neighbor, Josephine. She also has hinted me a couple of times not to come because of this Corona-virus.” Katherine said this last sentence in the hope of seeking considerations from Martha.
3. “That’s what I want you to realize. No one is ready to take risk against this Corona-virus.” Martha was more assertive this time. Katherine cursed herself why she disclosed Josephine’s intention to Martha. It certainly had supported Martha’s stance.
4. “Ma'am I cover my face with a mask all the time and the first thing I do is rinse my hands with a sanitizer as soon as I come here”; she tried to convince Martha. Martha ignored her. "Distancing from one another is the only way to protect ourselves from the virus", said Martha.
5. “You see I do not have cold, cough, fever or any other symptoms of this disease”; she again tried to bring Martha around. “I am sorry Katherine, in these circumstances, I cannot let you come here and that’s final. I advise you to stay at home and wait unless the Corona-virus is gone.”
6. “What about Suzy, she pointed to Martha’s seven-year old daughter. She is quite attached to me and needs my presence in the absence of you and your husband.” This time Katherine was sure to get a favorable response from Martha.
7. “You need not worry about her since Joseph and I remain in the house these days due to the lock-down, so we can manage Suzy’s responsibilities as well as of the household.” Martha remained firm in her decision.
8. After losing in arguments with Martha, Katherine left Martha’s house with teary-eyes.
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