childrenofparadise
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Hello! :-D
Can someone help me to correct this writing essay? It would be so graceful. It is a task from the IELTS, which I'm preparing by myself.
Thanks in advance for your answer. :up:
The table compares the rates of females studying mathematics between three fields (university undergraduate, postgraduate, and in mathematical areas post university) and six different countries. Overall, it is evident from the graph that more women in Turkey study mathematics than anywhere else.
At first sight it is clear that the percentage of women studying mathematics is dramatically low in both countries. It never overcomes the third of the whole math students. Moreover it sharply decreases with an increase in age: barely 1% of women go on to work in mathematical areas in Italy.
Interestingly though, there are some clear differences between countries. While Italy reaches a record low –France is not high either-, other countries such as the US or Japan show less gender inequalities in this field. But the proportion of females studying math noticeably reaches the highest peak in Turkey, at every level: on average, it tends to 30%.
Can someone help me to correct this writing essay? It would be so graceful. It is a task from the IELTS, which I'm preparing by myself.
Thanks in advance for your answer. :up:
The table compares the rates of females studying mathematics between three fields (university undergraduate, postgraduate, and in mathematical areas post university) and six different countries. Overall, it is evident from the graph that more women in Turkey study mathematics than anywhere else.
At first sight it is clear that the percentage of women studying mathematics is dramatically low in both countries. It never overcomes the third of the whole math students. Moreover it sharply decreases with an increase in age: barely 1% of women go on to work in mathematical areas in Italy.
Interestingly though, there are some clear differences between countries. While Italy reaches a record low –France is not high either-, other countries such as the US or Japan show less gender inequalities in this field. But the proportion of females studying math noticeably reaches the highest peak in Turkey, at every level: on average, it tends to 30%.
