diamondcutter
Senior Member
- Joined
- Oct 21, 2014
- Member Type
- English Teacher
- Native Language
- Chinese
- Home Country
- China
- Current Location
- China
We still haven’t explored our seas and oceans completely but here are some interesting sea animals.
Seals live in the sea and on land, like turtles, but they don’t lay eggs! They are mammals, so they have babies and feed them milk.
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Source: Kid’s Box 6, CUP
I don’t think the first sentence is well-written. What do you think of my improvement as follows.
We still haven’t explored our seas and oceans completely but here are some interesting sea animals, which we have already known much.
Seals live in the sea and on land, like turtles, but they don’t lay eggs! They are mammals, so they have babies and feed them milk.
...
Source: Kid’s Box 6, CUP
I don’t think the first sentence is well-written. What do you think of my improvement as follows.
We still haven’t explored our seas and oceans completely but here are some interesting sea animals, which we have already known much.