Below is a recording of my daughter reading some of her own writing. I'm just wondering if you can give her some comments and suggest areas that she can improve on. [corrected to reflect @emsr2d2 comments]
Sorry to bother you. Below is a recording of my girl'sdaughter reading some of her own writing. I'm just wondering if you can give her some comments and suggest areas what she can improve on.her.
Note my corrections above. I was very surprised to see so many basic mistakes in just a couple of sentences, given that I had just read your report on Tolkien. You need to take as much care with standard posts here as you did with the report.
I'm sure someone will have time to listen and comment soon.