ambitious-girl
Senior Member
- Joined
- Apr 29, 2017
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Persian
- Home Country
- Iran
- Current Location
- Iran
The following paragraph is about my career. I want to know if it has the good cohesion and coherence, and also how many mistakes there are in this short essay.
I love my job. I really enjoy it when I am at work and doing my tasks. However, I find it so challenging, as it requires a lot of concentration and determination, which sometimes makes me feel stressed. In other words, it is such a stressful job. Still, I have a friendly, comfortable, and
healthy working environment, and I get on really well with almost all of my colleagues as well. This has greatly increased my productivity during my working hours. In terms of salary, my job is great because it is a high paying job that almost meets my financial requirements. However, it has its disadvantages. The worst thing about my job is that I have to/must be on call and available for 7 days a week, 24 hours a day to respond to emergencies and then handle them if anything might go wrong with our servers. Similarly, I have to be sure that all of the servers are continuously available. However, I don't always have to be at work to solve these kinds of problems since I can do telecommuting.
I love my job. I really enjoy it when I am at work and doing my tasks. However, I find it so challenging, as it requires a lot of concentration and determination, which sometimes makes me feel stressed. In other words, it is such a stressful job. Still, I have a friendly, comfortable, and
healthy working environment, and I get on really well with almost all of my colleagues as well. This has greatly increased my productivity during my working hours. In terms of salary, my job is great because it is a high paying job that almost meets my financial requirements. However, it has its disadvantages. The worst thing about my job is that I have to/must be on call and available for 7 days a week, 24 hours a day to respond to emergencies and then handle them if anything might go wrong with our servers. Similarly, I have to be sure that all of the servers are continuously available. However, I don't always have to be at work to solve these kinds of problems since I can do telecommuting.
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