Economist2010
Member
- Joined
- Dec 22, 2011
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Arabic
- Home Country
- Egypt
- Current Location
- Egypt
I appreciate your help on editing the below e-mail. I am going to send it to a CEO.
"Without going into details, I know that my earlier prospect/attempt of joining the bank got messed up/was muddled and there was a bad luck or misfortune although your and Mr. Hussam's enthusiasm in my candidacy.
From the standpoint that the bank supports and gives way to young energies, I am writing to you today to renew your confidence in me as a candidate and to give me a chance to add value to the bank and I assure that your confidence will prove justified.
Accordingly, I put on myself a commitment of tripling or above triple the figures in three month time. If I didn't achieve that, will provide my resignation to the bank. Let's make that as a deal I will triple the figures of new acquisition, value, and utilisation. Only made possible through your support. If I not succeed, I will quit.
I hope that you see that is in the interest of the bank and that you give me the full support to make this success story."
"Without going into details, I know that my earlier prospect/attempt of joining the bank got messed up/was muddled and there was a bad luck or misfortune although your and Mr. Hussam's enthusiasm in my candidacy.
From the standpoint that the bank supports and gives way to young energies, I am writing to you today to renew your confidence in me as a candidate and to give me a chance to add value to the bank and I assure that your confidence will prove justified.
Accordingly, I put on myself a commitment of tripling or above triple the figures in three month time. If I didn't achieve that, will provide my resignation to the bank. Let's make that as a deal I will triple the figures of new acquisition, value, and utilisation. Only made possible through your support. If I not succeed, I will quit.
I hope that you see that is in the interest of the bank and that you give me the full support to make this success story."