Report writing

[Goldenboy12]

I have composed a brief report to help improve my writing skills. I wonder if you can read the report, and advise if it makes sense.

I never thought it would be so difficult. It is a really hard job, and the people were shouting my name. The manager is on holiday and the boy who was acting as manager went home because his daughter is not feeling. He said I should call him if there are any problems. I hope things will go as planned. It's been a really tough day for us.

 

[teechar]

I have composed a brief report to help improve my writing skills. I wonder if you can read the report, and advise if it makes sense.

I never thought it would be so difficult. It [STRIKE]is[/STRIKE] turned out to be a really hard job, and the people were shouting my name. The manager is on holiday, and the boy who was acting as manager went home because his daughter [STRIKE]is[/STRIKE] was not feeling. He said I should call him if there are any problems. I hope things will go as planned. It's been a really tough day for us.

The underlined sentence is about the future, but the rest of the text is about the past; why the discrepancy?

 

[emsr2d2]

Is the person who is acting as manager really a "boy"? That seems unlikely if he has a daughter. I think you should probably refer to him as a man.