to run away from a shooting

[alpacinou]

Hello.

I'm trying to describe a situation where a person is running from a mass shooting. How can I describe the sounds a person hears in that situation and the bullet holes that appear on the wall or concrete?

Can I say "he was running with his life"?

What are some other sentences I can use to make it more dramatic?

 

[Tarheel]

Hello.

I'm trying to describe a situation where a person is running from a mass shooting. How can I describe the sounds a person hears in that situation and the bullet holes that appear on the wall or concrete?

Can I say "he was running for his life"?

What are some other sentences I can use to make it more dramatic?

He heart was beating fast. He was trembling with fear.

 

[alpacinou]

How can I describe the sound that is produced when a bullet creates a hole on the wall or in the asphalt or concrete? Also, some bits of concrete are thrown in the air and scattered. How can I mention that?

How can I describe that visually?

 

[emsr2d2]

Can I say "He was running with his life"?

When you quote a full sentence, remember to start it with a capital letter.

 

[alpacinou]

How can I describe the sound that is produced when a bullet creates a hole on the wall or in the asphalt or concrete? Also, some bits of concrete are thrown in the air and scattered. How can I mention that?

How can I describe that visually?

I think I can use the verb "ricochet" as well, right?

 

[Tarheel]

Yes. When a bullet does that it bounces off of something. That can, of course, be dangerous.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

Writers often say:

- a hail of bullets
- the stacatto of gunfire

For onomatopoeia:

- rat-a-tat-tat
- pow
- ping

 

[alpacinou]

Writers often say:

- a hail of bullets
- the stacatto of gunfire

For onomatopoeia:

- rat-a-tat-tat
- pow
- ping

Could you used those in full sentences?

Also, how can I describe the situation in terms of what a person sees? I mean the bullet holes and stuff like that.

 

[emsr2d2]

bullet-ridden (for a surface full of bullet holes)

 

[Tarheel]

Riddled with bullets.