Do you feel anything wrong in this sentence?

[roseriver1012]

Right! Not grammatically wrong, but not natural. Your replies make it clear to me now! Thanks!

[Eric Davis]

Right! Not grammatically wrong, but not natural. Your replies make it clear to me now! Thanks!

It wasn't a terrible sentence. I have written worse.

[kl004535]

not a teacher
The word 'maybe' is wrongly used.

I agree.

[kl004535]

I think this will be closer to the meaning meant:

"All in all, maybe going to the west brings more benefits."

I agree.

In the case of Maybe:
Maybe is an adverb and it should be put at the front of the clause, because it modifies the whole clause following it.

In the case of May:
May is a modal verb. It should be put ahead of "bring" in the case of your sentence.

[kfredson]

I agree.

In the case of Maybe:
Maybe is an adverb and it should be put at the front of the clause, because it modifies the whole clause following it.

In the case of May:
May is a modal verb. It should be put ahead of "bring" in the case of your sentence.

I would agree that it sounds more natural to place "maybe" at the front of the clause. However, it loses the emphasis on "going to the West." I would leave it where it is. Better yet, I would replace it with "perhaps."

[corum]

All in all, going to the west maybe brings more benefits

It is correct. You can place a content disjunct between any two adjecent constituents that are immediately dominated by the S node. See below:




Maybe (1.), all in all, going to the west...
All in all, maybe (2.), going to the west brings more benefits.
All in all, going to the west maybe (3.) brings more benefits.
All in all, going to the west brings more benefits maybe (4.).