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please check for the grammar
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He is very rich, he has a very lavish and healthy lifestyle. His only philosophy has been to enjoy life to fullest because life is too short. Eat everything, drink anything that defines his life. His work out has been only at pubs and sometimes even at disc. But one fine day he wakes up not only to find himself on the hospital bed, but also realises that all his wealth has been drained for the welfare of the hospital. Life is really short, isn’t it?
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I am really concern about my health, but I don’t have time. I have set goals for me and time is running against me. I have to run faster and beat every challenge, dressed as hurdle that comes in front of me. You see life is very stressful, I have suffered first heart attack at 25, but i m fully focused and committed to accumulate wealth
Last edited by new2grammar; 30-Apr-2011 at 20:36.
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Re: please check for the grammar

Originally Posted by
new2grammar
He is very rich, he has a very lavish and healthy lifestyle. His only philosophy has been to enjoy life to fullest because life is too short. Eat everything, drink anything that defines his life. His work out has been only at pubs and sometimes even at disc. But one fine day he wakes up not only to find himself on the hospital bed, but also realises that all his wealth has been drained for the welfare of the hospital. Life is really short, isn’t it?
Grammatically it's fine. It's not very well written though.
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Re: please check for the grammar

Originally Posted by
new2grammar
He is very rich, he has a very lavish and healthy lifestyle. His only philosophy has been to enjoy life to fullest because life is too short. Eat everything, drink anything that defines his life. His work out has been only at pubs and sometimes even at disc. But one fine day he wakes up not only to find himself on the hospital bed, but also realises that all his wealth has been drained for the welfare of the hospital. Life is really short, isn’t it?
I think you mean disco rather than disc.
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Re: please check for the grammar
2.
I am really concern
ed about my health, but I don’t have time.
(What don't you have time for?)
I have set goals for
myself and time is running against me. I have to run faster and beat every challenge,
dressed as hurdle that comes in front of me.
(That bit doesn't make sense.)
You see
, life is very stressful
. I
have suffered
my first heart attack at 25, but
I'm fully focused and committed to accumulat
ing wealth
. Rover
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Re: please check for the grammar

Originally Posted by
bhaisahab
Grammatically it's fine. It's not very well written though.
Hello sir,
Basically I have to promote Health is wealth, So was just writing whatever came to my mind. Can you hwelp me improve it and please also let me kow about the second para
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Re: please check for the grammar
Can you
help me improve it and please also let me k
now about the second para
graph. I did that in message #4.
Rover
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