Re: English paper: Academic Goals
Hello Marie, and welcome to Using English.
Your two sentences are completely unrelated to each other.
Also your first sentence uses the impersonal " one" but it's supposed to be about you want.
Don't try to write such long and complicated sentences. Start by simply saying what your goal is (or goals are).
Last edited by Barb_D; 24-Sep-2011 at 20:27.
I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.