criminal intrusion

[vectra]

Hello,

I am not sure about 'criminal intrusion' in the memo sent by a student:

'In order to prevent criminal intrusion do not leave your office unattended. When you leave your office, you should lock it.'

Maybe we should say 'in order to prevent office break-ins' or 'in order to prevent stealing things from offices'?

Could you share your ideas please?

Thank you in advance.

[5jj]

Maybe we should say 'in order to prevent office break-ins' or 'in order to prevent stealing things being stolen from offices'?

Your student's version is not natural English.

Your first suggestion is fine, except that if the office is unlocked, we can't really refer to a break-in. I think I'd go for something brief, such as 'Prevent theft.' You may well get better suggestions.

[SoothingDave]

Please lock your office doors in order to deter theft.

[Gillnetter]

Hello,

I am not sure about 'criminal intrusion' in the memo sent by a student:

'In order to prevent criminal intrusion do not leave your office unattended. When you leave your office, you should lock it.'

Maybe we should say 'in order to prevent office break-ins' or 'in order to prevent stealing things from offices'?

The "criminal intrusion" part makes sense though it is a bit awkward.
I would opt for, "In order to prevent theft, do not leave your office unattended..." , of course, what this says is to make sure that someone is always in the office. To made this sentence reasonable the first part should be connected to the second part - "In order to prevent theft do not leave your office unattended. If you have to leave your office for any reason, remember to lock it."
Could you share your ideas please?

Thank you in advance.

Gil