Re: Writing a News Article Title
Way too long for a headline.
Father Divested of Custody and Parental Rights of Child after Denying Motherís Visitation Rights
Father Denies Mother Visition, Loses Custody
The second headline is both redundant but non-informative.
Obviously, if it's a custody battle, it's Domestic Relations.
You're making the reader assume the plaintiff is the mother.
But you also just gave the outcome in the main header, so what extra informatin are you providing here that you haven't already given?
I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.