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She was so happy that she jumped up suddenly, lost her balance and and fell down.
This sentence leaves little room for doubt.
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- 14-Dec-2011, 10:46 #1
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fall down She was extremely happy so she suddenly jumped up and fell down.
Is this sentence correct? I am talking about the underlined part. I want to say she couldn't control her balance and couldn't land successfully.
- 14-Dec-2011, 12:54 #2
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- 14-Dec-2011, 14:32 #3
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Re: fall down [QUOTE=English4everyone;832600]She was extremely happy so she suddenly jumped up and fell down.
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(1) I cannot explain why, but I think that your sentence sounds a bit strange.
(a) Maybe (?) because the verbs "jumped up" and "fell down" are so close together.
(2) I would be more comfortable with:
She was extremely happy, so she suddenly jumped up and just as suddenly fell
down.
- 14-Dec-2011, 16:21 #4
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Re: fall down She was extremely happy, so she suddenly jumped up and just as suddenly fell
down .
That will certainly work as well, Parser. Unless someone objects to too many "suddenly" being so close together.
But, I prefer your sentence to all others, so you can have a gold star and an ice-cream cone too
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- 14-Dec-2011, 16:51 #5
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Re: fall down If there's ice cream involved, then my submission is:
She jumped for joy, but botched the landing.
- 14-Dec-2011, 16:58 #6
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Re: fall down Not a teacher
Originally Posted by English4everyone 
Though this sentence sounds a little bit strange , It sounds great( to me). I don't know why .
- 14-Dec-2011, 19:26 #7
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Re: fall down The problem with the original is that it implies she fell down deliberately, as an intended part of her expression of joy.
I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.
- 14-Dec-2011, 20:29 #8
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Re: fall down [QUOTE=JohnParis;832716]
an ice-cream cone too!
Delicious!
- 14-Dec-2011, 20:32 #9
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Re: fall down [QUOTE=Barb_D;832763]it implies she fell down deliberately,
That's it!
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