Is this correct eloquent English?

[iSergiwa]

I have this thought in mind and I need to make sure it is correct and eloquent before I post it somewhere else:

"Rage is to Comics like Rap is to Music."

If this is prosaic/wrong English then would you mind giving me the eloquent/correct alternative.

Thanks

[bhaisahab]

I have this thought in mind and I need to make sure it is correct and eloquent before I post it somewhere else:

"Rage is to Comics like Rap is to Music."

If this is prosaic/wrong English then would you mind giving me the eloquent/correct alternative.

Thanks

It doesn't make any sense to me.

[iSergiwa]

bhaisahab, you know I am asking about the grammar not the meaning right?
OK, let me give another one:
"Candy is to Kids like Sex is to Adults"
Is this correct English?

[emsr2d2]

It's difficult to separate grammar from meaning in some examples.

The construction "A is to B as C is to D" is a commonly used construction, but only where the examples you use actually make sense. The main error with yours is that you have inexplicably capitalised words in the sentence other than the first letter of the sentence.

[iSergiwa]

It's difficult to separate grammar from meaning in some examples.

The construction "A is to B as C is to D" is a commonly used construction, but only where the examples you use actually make sense. The main error with yours is that you have inexplicably capitalised words in the sentence other than the first letter of the sentence.

Thank you for understanding me, so tell me please: is the following sentence correct English now:
"Candy is to kids like sex is to adults"
if not, could you please correct it for me?
Thanks

[emsr2d2]

I have already told you that "A is to B as C is to D" is a correct construction, so grammatically the construction you have used is correct.

The examples you have chosen "Candy/kids" and "sex/adults" doesn't make much sense unless you simply mean that they give the same amount of pleasure to those people. That excludes all the adults who would rather have candy than sex! I don't find it a very natural example of the construction.

[iSergiwa]

I see. So the original one is grammatically correct too. That's all what I wanted to know. Whether it makes sense or not is not the field of specialization of this forum.

Thank you very much

[emsr2d2]

I see. So the original one is grammatically correct too. That's all what I wanted to know. Whether it makes sense or not is not the field of specialization of this forum.

Thank you very much

Helping people to write grammatically correct English which makes sense is very much the point of this forum, I can assure you.

[iSergiwa]

Helping people to write grammatically correct English which makes sense is very much the point of this forum, I can assure you.

I don't think so, because what makes sense to you does not necessarily makes sense to me and vice versa. An English sentence like: "All men enjoy sex with women" does not make any sense to an English grammar teacher who is gay although it is grammatically correct :)

Thank you

[emsr2d2]

I don't think so, because what makes sense to you does not necessarily makes sense to me and vice versa. An English sentence like: "All men enjoy sex with women" does not make any sense to an English grammar teacher who is gay although it is grammatically correct :)

Thank you

There is a big difference between something making sense and something being factually accurate/inaccurate. Stating that "all men enjoy sex with women" is grammatically correct, makes sense (ie the meaning of the words put together can be understood) but is factually inaccurate.