reunification of Germany takes place
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There definitely is a long way until a true reunification of Germany on all levels. Films like ‘Goodbye Lenin’ might help improving and facilitating mutual understanding.
This is a student review of the film Goodbye Lenin which I found in a CPE sample paper here. According to the examiner, this review contains a few minor errors
The first sentence seems incomplete to me. I think we need to add a verb and I would change the position of “definitely”:
There is definitely a long way until a true reunification of Germany takes place on all levels.
- Is the position of “definitely” more appropriate in my rewritten sentence?
- Is the addition of “takes place” appropriate here?
Thank you in advance.
Re: reunification of Germany takes place
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Originally Posted by
Chicken Sandwich
[…]
There definitely is a long way until a true reunification of Germany on all levels. Films like ‘Goodbye Lenin’ might help improving and facilitating mutual understanding.
This is a student review of the film
Goodbye Lenin which I found in a CPE sample paper
here. According to the examiner, this review contains a few minor errors
The first sentence seems incomplete to me. I think we need to add a verb and I would change the position of “definitely”:
There is definitely a long way until a true reunification of Germany takes place on all levels. - Is the position of “definitely” more appropriate in my rewritten sentence?
- Is the addition of “takes place” appropriate here?
Thank you in advance.
The first sentence isn't well written at all. I would try:
There is definitely a long way to go until the true reunification of Germany ...
It will be a long time before the true reunification of Germany takes place ...
The second sentence is incorrect too.
Re: reunification of Germany takes place
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Originally Posted by
Chicken Sandwich
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There definitely is a long way until a true reunification of Germany (Something is needed here) on all levels. Films like ‘Goodbye Lenin’ might help
(Something is needed here) improving and facilitating mutual understanding.
This is a student review of the film
Goodbye Lenin which I found in a CPE sample paper
here. According to the examiner, this review contains a few minor errors
The first sentence seems incomplete to me. I think we need to add a verb and I would change the position of “definitely”:
There is definitely a long way until a true reunification of Germany takes place on all levels. - Is the position of “definitely” more appropriate in my rewritten sentence?
- Is the addition of “takes place” appropriate here?
Thank you in advance.
Try inserting some words in the places I noted above. After you do that we can consider whether placement is important.
Re: reunification of Germany takes place
Thanks, emsr2d2.
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Gillnetter
Try inserting some words in the places I noted above. After you do that we can consider whether placement is important.
Gillnetter, I tried to insert a few words into the first sentence, but from your response I take it that my version is wrong too?
Regarding the second a sentence, I'm not quite sure how we can correct it by adding a few words. My initial idea was to change it altogether:
Films like ‘Goodbye Lenin’ might help to improve and facilitate a mutual understanding.
Did you have this in mind, 'Films like ‘Goodbye Lenin’ might help to establish an improving and facilitating mutual understanding'?
Thank you in advance.
Re: reunification of Germany takes place
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Originally Posted by
Chicken Sandwich
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There definitely is a long way (to go) until a true reunification of Germany (occurs, happens, takes place, is achieved, is realized, etc.) on all levels. Films like ‘Goodbye Lenin’ might help
(by) improving and facilitating mutual understanding.
This is a student review of the film
Goodbye Lenin which I found in a CPE sample paper
here. According to the examiner, this review contains a few minor errors
The first sentence seems incomplete to me. I think we need to add a verb and I would change the position of “definitely”:
There is definitely a long way (to go) until a true reunification of Germany takes place on all levels.
- Is the position of “definitely” more appropriate in my rewritten sentence?
- Is the addition of “takes place” appropriate here?
Thank you in advance.
When asked to remedy minor errors it is best not to reconstruct a sentence.
Re: reunification of Germany takes place
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Originally Posted by
Gillnetter
When asked to remedy minor errors it is best not to reconstruct a sentence.
Well, in that case, I'm out of ideas :oops:. The only way I can make it work is to write, 'Films like ‘Goodbye Lenin’ might help (to) improve and facilitate a mutual understanding.'
I don't know how I can fix the sentence by filling in the gaps in 'Films like ‘Goodbye Lenin’ might help . . . . . . . . . . . . . improving and facilitating mutual understanding.'
Re: reunification of Germany takes place
Use "by" after "might help".
Re: reunification of Germany takes place
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Originally Posted by
Gillnetter
Use "by" after "might help".
Ouch :oops: ... it's so obvious. Thanks!