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What comes up in your mind when you hear ”fairness”? The racism during the second world and how cruel the human treated the jew people? Or why your mother gets a lower salary than your teacher even though she works as hard as him? Or maybe if it is right or wrong to use animals in research? Fairness is nothing but a simple concept that defines all human’s view of a perfect world, a world that is not possibly true.
What is your question?
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Originally Posted by Grumpy
If it sounds alright :) and if you as a reader get my point
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Originally Posted by ladyTL
I understand your point. What is this piece for? Is it an assignment?
It's for an essay, but I'm not done with it yet. So I just choose a piece from it (its actually the opening).Quote:
Originally Posted by emsr2d2
Does it sound as a good opening or it sounds weird?
If it's for an essay which you are going to submit for marking, then we are unable to help at this stage. Your teacher/tutor needs to see your work, not our work. After you have submitted it and have received it back, do come back to us with any errors or amendments which you don't understand.
It is. He has corrected it, but he doesn't use to mark. Instead he just mark a part/sentence and then say "think about it one more time"
Therefor I have to rewrite my opening.
OK, but do you have to rewrite it and then submit it again?Quote:
Originally Posted by ladyTL
I don't really get his point. But it seems like we are going to submit it again or more like let him see if we have understand the wrongs. But the grade of the essay won't be change, that's for certain.