how to write a good academic goal essay?

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Dear..I am working on an academic goal essay, but I don't know how to write it well. Do you have any strategy, techonology, ...?Can you share with me? Thanks alot.
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[Tdol]

The most important thing is to be able to condense your goal into a crystal clear sentence. What is your goal?

[ccnnhtdt]

The most important thing is to be able to condense your goal into a crystal clear sentence. What is your goal?

I have many goals. I want an accounting bachelor degree,achieve scholarship, join school activities and master English. I don't have any experience in writitng an academic goal essay. I want my essays can be a hook, get attention from readers.

Thanks for replying me.

[Tdol]

OK, now why do you want to achieve these things; what do you plan to do with them?

[ccnnhtdt]

OK, now why do you want to achieve these things; what do you plan to do with them?

Because accounting field gives me oppurtunities to work at offices. I dont deny physical jobs, but accounting is going to settle me in only one seat. I work with numbers, documents, computers and businessmen. This major also offers a stardard working time, 8 hours a day, makes my mind up and adapt a professional working system.


I would like to achieve scholarship not for school fee, but for my ability. I want to know how much I can do, how deep my knowledge is. Scholarship is always an academic encouragement afforcing my study mind.

Unlike movie stars, I am not interested in wining widespread fame at Hollywood. However. I want to be popular in school. I want to be a cell of my school, an active volunteer, and an excellent student.

I pursue all of goal in order to affirm my ability.

[Tdol]

Because accounting field gives me oppurtunities to work at offices. I dont deny physical jobs, but accounting is going to settle me in only one seat. I work with numbers, documents, computers and businessmen. This major also offers a stardard working time, 8 hours a day, makes my mind up and adapt a professional working system.

OK Let's break this down:
1 Accounting gives me the opportunity to work in an office
Many professions work in offices, so this does not seem a very strong factor to me. You should start with the strongest factor. How about something like this:
As someone who has always been interested in mathematics, accountancy appeals to me as it would allow me to use my skills in a practical way, doing one of the most important jobs in a company.

2 physical jobs
This isn't relevant- concentrate purely on what you have to give and what you want to learn.

3 This major also offers a stardard working time, 8 hours a day
This actually sounds a bit negative, as if you are that committed. You shoudl write instead about the positive things- working in a team in an office, using many different skills, etc

[ccnnhtdt]

OK Let's break this down:
1 Accounting gives me the opportunity to work in an office
Many professions work in offices, so this does not seem a very strong factor to me. You should start with the strongest factor. How about something like this:
As someone who has always been interested in mathematics, accountancy appeals to me as it would allow me to use my skills in a practical way, doing one of the most important jobs in a company.

2 physical jobs
This isn't relevant- concentrate purely on what you have to give and what you want to learn.

3 This major also offers a stardard working time, 8 hours a day
This actually sounds a bit negative, as if you are that committed. You shoudl write instead about the positive things- working in a team in an office, using many different skills, etc

Excellent advices. I will wrtie my essay with possitive points and a strong way. Thank you so much... ^_^

[Tdol]

OK, post it here when you're finished and I'll take a look.