Letter to apply for an ATM card

[muktha]

Dear Mr.X,

Re: Application of ATM Card

I have opened an account with your bank recently and would like to apply for an ATM Card. My account no is xxxx. I shall be grateful, if you could inform me the procedure to apply for the card. I would also like to know the duration to obtain the card, once applied.

Awaiting a favorable response from you.

Yours sincerely,
Muktha Naive

[sarat_106]

Dear Mr.X,

Re: Application of ATM Card

I have opened an account with your bank recently and would like to avail the facility of ATM Card. My account no is xxxx. I shall be grateful, if you could inform me the procedure to apply for the card. I would also like to know the time required for issue of the card, once applied.

Awaiting a favorable response from you.

Yours sincerely,
Muktha Naive

[Anglika]

Dear Mr.X,

Re: Application of ATM Card

I have opened an account with your bank recently and would like to avail the facility of ATM Card. My account no is xxxx. I shall be grateful, if you could inform me the procedure to apply for the card. I would also like to know the time required for issue of the card, once applied.

Awaiting a favorable response from you.

Yours sincerely,
Muktha Naive

With respect, the original letter's "apply for an ATM card" was better. It is clear and to the point.

[Daruma]

"My account no is xxxx."

Wouldn't "number" better?

[Daruma]

"I shall be grateful, if you could inform me the procedure to apply for the card."

Would it be better to say "I would be grateful if you could tell me what I should do to apply for an ATM card"?

[bhaisahab]

"I shall be grateful, if you could inform me the procedure to apply for the card."

Would it be better to say "I would be grateful if you could tell me what I should do to apply for an ATM card"?

'Shall' is fine. It is widely used and considered polite in India.

[bhaisahab]

"My account no is xxxx."

Wouldn't "number" better?

'N°' is the widely accepted abbreviation.

[Daruma]

'Shall' is fine. It is widely used and considered polite in India.

"I shall be grateful, if you could inform me the procedure to apply for the card."

inform + someone + something
Is this acceptable?

[Daruma]

'N°' is the widely accepted abbreviation.

Isn't No. correct?

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[bhaisahab]

"I shall be grateful, if you could inform me the procedure to apply for the card."

inform + someone + something
Is this acceptable?

Inform someone of something.