Please Edit my paragraph

[Ever Student]

"Freedom"

A fly is flying around my head, it came just through the window. Now it's leaving me alone towards a cutain hanging on the kitchen. A flower basket set on the table and the fly throws itself at the basket. Let me see another place which it wants to sit. A garbage bin in the corner of the kitchen is a good condition to be taken up by a fly. To sit there, it goes around back my head and told me it is able to do everything it likes and my permission has not any role in this play. After ending the project, this little creature is going to leave the house through a wide open door.

[rocking]

Hello, at first reading, I found the verb tenses a little confusing. so I made some changes. The corrections are in blue and green (for an alternative). The red wordings are problematic - you need another synonym of place and rest.

yours was interesting observations.
"Freedom"

A fly is/was flying around my head, it had just came just through the window. Now it's leaving me alone towards a cutain hanging on the kitchen. A flower basket set/sits on the table and the fly throws itself at the basket. Let me see another place which it wants to sit. A garbage bin in the corner of the kitchen is a good condition to be taken up by a fly (??). To sit there, it goes around back/comes back over my head and told /tells me it is able to do everything it likes and my permission has not any role in this/its play/game. After ending the project, this little creature is going to leave the house through a wide open door.

[Ever Student]

Thank you for your editing,
I mean "a garbage is a good place to be occupied by a fly".

Now would you please take a glance at "suspending" paragraph.
Nobody has edited it yet.

[Raymott]

Originally Posted by taghavi

"Freedom"

A fly is flying around my head; it just came through the window. Now it's leaving me alone towards a curtain hanging on the kitchen. A flower basket sits on the table and the fly throws itself at the basket. Let me see another place which where it wants to sit. A garbage bin in the corner of the kitchen is a good condition place to be taken up by a fly. To sit there, it goes around back my head and tells me it is able to do everything it likes and my permission has not any role in this play choice. After ending the project, this little creature is going to leave the house through a wide open door.

Make sure you keep the tense the same. This passage is primarily in the present tense, so you can't just put a past tense phrase in somewhere.

[Ever Student]

Hello,
Thanks alot.
I will try to do your order.

[Raymott]

Originally Posted by taghavi

Hello,
Thanks alot.
I will try to do your order.

It's a suggestion or some advice, not an order.
An order is something that a policeman tells you to do.

"I will try to follow your advice".
"I will try to follow your suggestions".

[Ever Student]

Yes, I will follow your advice. Thanks
Would you please take a glance at my "Suspending" paragraph that I sent before. I need your help.