Need someone to take a look at editing please.

[beenche]

This will be a parent dedication page for a graduation.
thanks for your consideration.

You have waited for this moment

Now, at last, it has come true

You have finally reached the summit

And, we are all quite proud of you
You are worthy of this triumph

No one could deserve it more

So, embrace this time before you

as you spread your wings and soar.



You have worked for countless hours

From dawn ‘til the setting sun

Never knowing where the outcome

Would lead, as each day was done

You stayed focused on the challenge

While you prepared to compete
And the days ‘til now were worth it

Your success has made them complete.



You have waited for graduation

And at last, it has arrived

Now, you stand triumphant

your heart and soul revived

From this time, you’ll move onward

Toward your future aspirations

But this day, enjoy your moment

With our joyous congratulations!


[buggles]

I've taken the liberty of altering things to make them scan a little better. I hope I haven't spoiled it for you.

You've waited for this moment.
At last, it has come true.
You've finally reached the summit

And we're really proud of you.
You're worthy of this triumph

No one deserves it more
Embrace this time before you
Spread your wings and soar.



You've worked for countless hours
From dawn till setting sun
Ne'er knowing where the outcome

Would lead when each day's done.
You focused on the challenge

While preparing to compete
The days till now were worth it
Success made them complete.



You've waited for graduation

At last, it has arrived.
You stand here now triumphant

Your heart and soul revived.
From now you’ll all move onward

To future aspirations.
Today enjoy your moment
With our congratulations!



Obviously, these things are subjective, but I hope my suggestions provide food for thought.


buggles (not a teacher)

[beenche]

I wanted to capture the struggles yet highlight the acheivement.
You've embraced the ideal and polished it nicely.
Thanks so much!