a funny story

[san2612]

In a crescent moon night, a turtle, a centipede and a rabbit were drinking wine together. They were amorously wondering why the moon was so beautiful when the bottle ran dry. The three drunkard wanted to drink more and more. But who of them would go out to buy a new one? The rabbit refused to do so by saying he got drunk and stood unsteadily . The turtle could not go out as well because he always felt shy and had a very short neck. Thus, the centipede had to do the extremely hard work. Indeed, he crawled too slowly to come to anywhere. The turtle and the rabbit were waiting longly in their home when they decided to look for the centipede. Surprisingly, at the time they came at the door, the centipede were wearing his shoes. As far as we know, a centipede has many foots. When would he finish wearing his shoes and tightening laces at all?
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It is in fact a funny story but if you don't find it funny or interesting., it is because of my poor ability of narrating a story.

[Trance Freak]

It was kind of funny + I have to admit that I giggled a bit

[Raymott]

On a crescent moon[moonlit] night, a turtle, a centipede and a rabbit were drinking wine together. They were amorously wondering why the moon was so beautiful when the bottle ran dry. The three drunkards wanted to drink more and more. But which of them would go out to buy a new one? The rabbit refused to do so by saying he got was drunk and stood unsteadily. The turtle could not go out as well either because he always felt shy and had a very short neck.
We generally don't use 'as well, also, too' with negatives.
Thus, the centipede had to do the extremely hard work. Indeed, he crawled too slowly to come to anywhere. The turtle and the rabbit were waiting longly in their home when they decided to look for the centipede. Surprisingly, at the time they came to the door, the centipede was wearing his shoes. As far as we know, a centipede has many feet. When would he finish wearing putting on his shoes and tightening his laces at all?
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It is in fact a funny story but if you don't find it funny or interesting., it is because of my poor ability of narrating a story.

R.

[san2612]

It was kind of funny + I have to admit that I giggled a bit

R.

Thanks very much,

Is it better if I write:

One moonlit night, on the ground,a turtle, a centipede and a rabbit were drinking wine together.

[Raymott]

Thanks very much,

Is it better if I use " their place" instead of "their home"?

"Their home" is right (if they all live there).
Actually I missed this. "Longly" is not right. I think you mean "for a long time".

[Ever Student]

Thank you for your nice story, San2612.

[sophie hannon]

lol that was good :)