I will do the TOEFL the next few days. So I wanted to ask you what you think about my essay. Please give it a rate...
You have deceided to give serveral hours of your time each month to improve the community where you live. What is one think you will do to improve your community? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
I decided to help in the local soccer club. A few days ago I heard that they are seeking for a new trainer for a youth team. It was always a dream of me to become a soccer trainer. I thought I will do it when I am older. But I think the time has come. I want to show you below, why I decided in this way.
First I like to play football. I started playing when I was eight years old. When I became 14, I started to play with the senior team of exactly this local club. At present I am one of the most important player in the team. I know how to play football and understand the tactics quite well. No wonder that many youth players look up to me. I want to learn them to understand soccer and that they have fun by playing it.
The second advantage is that I like children. I have a very young brother too. So I know how to act with children and I can estimate what it means to become a youth trainer. I know that it can sometimes be hard and that it need nerves, but I think I am old enough for it. I had many trainers in my career and my goal will be to pick out all advantages of them.
Thirdly I like outdoor activities, but I also want to work indoor. This job will give me exactly that. I will do the tactics at home and administrate the training on the ground. In my view this is a very important fact for a good job.
In conclusion I think that I will have fun by doing something good for our community. And this gives me the power to work for the community.
Thank you very much.